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Creative Writing

Posted in Uncategorized on March 31, 2009 by thumabr

In the Lake of the Woods Alternate ending

And with that, John stopped broadcasting and dropped the radio overboard.  Deep in the waters of Canada he was finally alone.  He was running from the horrors of his previous life.  The horrible acts of Vietnam, his lies, his misdeeds, his crushing defeat in the primary, his struggle and strife with Kathy.  All was behind him.  He drowned them in the Lake.  Buried deep within him, in the pits of his soul they would try to resurface, but he would chain them back down to the bottom, ignoring his past.  

As he pushed his Chris-Craft steadily Northward further into Canadian terriorty all he could be reminded of was the loss of the love of his life.  He battered his mind, struggling to come to terms with what had happened.  Kathy was gone, and soon he would be too.  How could he have allowed himself to let this happen?  Was it his troubled past that clouded his judgement? Why couldnt his deep seeded need to be loved be appeased by the devotion of Kathy?  He seemed to have had it all, thats what he told himself. He had his lover, but had lost the entire future he had dreamed of since before the war.  One was nothing without the other.  If he couldnt have both, he needn’t the other.  The attrocities of his life, his Post Dramatic Stress warped his idea of reality, to the point where he would lose himself into another man, into a different personality, one that only knew pain, one that could only inflict pain.  All he could do was think about his fuzzy remembrance of that horrible night, the night where John lost himself to a different self, and where Kathy would soon lose her self.

That man who took over was incensed with rage.  “Kill Jesus” was all he could think.  But there was no Jesus.  There was no God.  A just God would not have allowed his life to be destroyed.  In vengeance he must destroy another life.  Kathy.  Poor sweet Kathy, wrapped up in her blankets, hopefull that their life will turn around.  She was so innocent.  But he did not care.  She must pay for his pain, some one must.

After boiling the plants, he discarded the tea kettle.  He wanted to feel her death in his own hands.  Feel what it is like to inflict such pain on her, the pain her fling with the dentist inflicted on him.  He climbed onto the bed, and wrapped his calloused hands around her slender neck and strangled her.  She struggled in terror, but he was too strong. Their eyes met for a brief instant, before her life was erased, like his dreams had been.

He took the body to the boat house, chopping it up into several pieces, puting each in a weighted garbage bag.  No one would ever find her.  The Lake would hide his guilt, like he had tried for so long to hide his guilt at Thuan Yen.  Driving deep into the lake he dropped pieces, weighted with lead into the depths of the Lake of the Woods.  At the last piece he sunk the boat.  An accident people would think.  A missing person in a huge lake. It happens all the time.

With these final thoughts in his mind, John realized that he could no longer suppress so much guilt.  There was no where to run, nowhere to hide.  Try as he might they would flare, and bring him as much pain as they had before. He knew his only option.  With this, he took a length of rope from the craft and affixed it to his leg, the other end to the boat. He proceeded to flip the vessel and sink it to its doom at the bottom of the Lake of the Woods.  As he sank the coldness overtook him.  His tears were washed away by the waters of the lake.  He peered up the surface one last time and uttered out in bubbled breath. “Kathy.”


Blog 11

Posted in Uncategorized on March 19, 2009 by thumabr

One instance of dialogue between Ragtime and In the Lake of the Woods is the connection in the personalities of John Wade and Mother’s Younger Brother.  Both are very secretive and keep everything on the inside.  They are both very withdrawn from the world.  One very clear similarity between them is that they both stalk or spy on their love interests.  Mother’s Younger Brother stalks Evelyn because he is too shy to tell her how he feels.  He even gets to the point to where he follows her and ends up masturbating in a closet to her.  Wade is the same way.  He stalks Kathy because he cant get the nerve to tell her how worried he is to lose her.  He follows her around all the time, playing spy games, and tracking her every move.

When these two men lose their lovers they are emotionally crushed.  Younger Brother cannot move on and goes to New York in hopes of finding Evelyn or learning where she might have gone.  He is distraught and just spends all his time creating weapons.  John Wade, when he finds Kathy missing he is incredibly upset and drinks his day away trying to supress the possibility that she left him.

These two mens obsession with their women is what connects them and is one of the many parallels that can be drawn between Ragtime and in the lake of the woods

Blog 10

Posted in Uncategorized on March 2, 2009 by thumabr

Peer review went pretty well.  It was nice to get some feedback on my paper, which we didnt have the opportunity to do on the first paper.  It helped to have people listen to our paper, while reading along.  Sometimes some of the sentences that made sense to me didnt make as much sense to my reviewers.  It was nice to do the review online so we didnt have to print out so many copies of our paper for everyone.  It also helped to get re-enforcement, by hearing what other people wrote their papers on, so we could know whether we were on track or not.

I had a few surface level errors that need fixed and I want to do a little more work to enhance the flow of the paper and make it a little more concise, which was pointed out in peer review after everyone sat through my six page paper.  I also need to fix how I cited my quotes, i put the page number in the wrong place.  I also need to do a works cited for the paper at the end.  Everyone seemed to like my paper so I wont be changing very much, just a few minor improvements.